Welcome to the 370th Virtual Poetry Circle!
Remember, this is just for fun and is not meant to be stressful.
Keep in mind what Molly Peacock’s book suggested.
Look at a line, a stanza, sentences, and images; describe what you like or don’t like; and offer an opinion. If you missed my review of her book, check it out here.
Today’s poem is from Mary Elizabeth Coleridge:
A Moment
The clouds had made a crimson crown
Above the mountains high.
The stormy sun was going down
In a stormy sky.
Why did you let your eyes so rest on me,
And hold your breath between?
In all the ages this can never be
As if it had not been.
What do you think?
I agree with Natalie that the last couple of lines fell flat, especially when reading it aloud. But I do like how it captures a single moment and made me think about several moments that stood out to me on my recent vacation that would make for an interesting poem(s).
Will you be writing these poems?
I don’t know. We’ll see.
Thank you for what you are doing; Mary Elizabeth Coleridge’s poem is nice but the last couple of lines seem deflated. It could be a choice; I like her alliteration.
I wondered about those last two lines — I wonder if they could have been rewritten in a stronger way. I think the beginning of the poem is very strong.
A brief and beautiful poem that captures a most memorable moment!
Serena, as you know I was in Japan for the past few weeks, but am now back, and able to blog a bit. Happy belated birthday to you! 🙂
Thank you for the birthday wishes, Suko